Friday, December 17, 2004

Please help me revising my grammar! I don't know what to fix!?

Since this is my first semester at 00 University I think I will need to experience and get accustomed to the atmosphere and how things are working at the school.
Also, I want to improve my weaknesses and technical issues especially the ones you mentioned before such as subtle touch, phrasing and sound. After I had a lesson with you, my tension and phrasing issues got so much better. You truly understood my problems and suggested extremely efficient ways to practice.

Instead of participating into many competitions, I would enter two competitions which are MTNA and the concerto competition at U of M in December.
I know that MTNA requires performing at least 30 minutes with the repertoires from at least two different periods of music.

I don’t think I will need both Ravel and Bartok pieces.
I’m thinking that keep Ondine and learn just first movement of Bartok Sonata. or just Ondine.
Do you have any other suggestion?

It would be greatly helpful to know which pieces to learn so I can prepare them during the summer.
I don’t have a flight ticket yet, but I'm planning to be in Colorado the beginning of the August.
I’m leaving to Korea on May 6th. Please keep in touch during the summer ( is there a better phrase that I can use instead of this sentence? )

Answer on Please help me revising my grammar! I don't know what to fix!?

Since this is my first semester at 00 University I think I will need to experience and get accustomed to the atmosphere and how things are working

work. this is not a beautiful sentence, but I guess permissible.

at the school.
Also, I want to improve

work on

my weaknesses and technical issues

,

especially the ones you mentioned before such as subtle touch,

I don't know what that means, but maybe your reader will.

phrasing and sound. After I had a lesson with you, my tension and phrasing issues got so much better. You truly understood my problems and suggested extremely efficient ways to practice.

Instead of participating into

just "in"

many competitions, I would enter two competitions which are MTNA and the concerto competition at U of M in December.

Oh, you play the piano! That explains the "touch".

I know that MTNA requires performing at least 30 minutes with the repertoires from at least two different periods of music.

I don’t think I will need both Ravel and Bartok pieces.
I’m thinking that keep

I'm thinking of keeping

Ondine [RESPECT! Can you play the rest of Gaspard also?] and learn just

the

first movement of

the

Bartok Sonata. or just Ondine.
Do you have any other suggestion?

It would be greatly

I wouldn't call this wrong, but say "immensely"

helpful to know which pieces to learn so I can prepare them during the summer.
I don’t have a flight ticket yet, but I'm planning to be in Colorado

at

the beginning of

no article

August.
I’m leaving to

for

Korea on May 6th. Please keep in touch during the summer ( is there a better phrase that I can use instead of this sentence? )

"Keep in touch" does well enough - and it reflects you the way you are known to your teacher.